1. Is the story interesting?
2. Am I giving enough information for the story to be clear and keep its focus?
3. I know I have to change the format of the story, but do you think the quotes should be included in my revision?
4. Do I need to give the reader more information on the siblings and mother? I want the focus to be Eddie's experience, so I included a little, but not much.
5. Is the voci
2. Am I giving enough information for the story to be clear and keep its focus?
3. I know I have to change the format of the story, but do you think the quotes should be included in my revision?
4. Do I need to give the reader more information on the siblings and mother? I want the focus to be Eddie's experience, so I included a little, but not much.
5. Is the voci